Dawn hung on the horizon like a picture frame, slightly askew, uneven orange flecks in its slate-ringed eyes, dew-pearled hair tousled by the warm breath of the levitating sun, grimy shadows filling the empty right angles of its lost perfection.
A dawn, teetering on a waning silver hook, pushed aside by a half- dressed dream scurrying after the imploding dark that still held in its coal-hewn hands, an alternative epilogue with a happy ending.
soft tendrils of hope
bird song clings to the breeze
as the morning sways
This is exquisite!! Wonderful ode to dawn. The imagery in the prose is outstanding, and the haiku _ what a fit. Very well done!
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Thanks so much 🙂
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This is exquisite. Beautiful imagery.
I love this line…. “teetering on a waning silver hook, pushed aside by a half- dressed dream”
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Love the image ‘Dawn hung on the horizon like a picture frame,…’ ~ beautiful painting with words here…appealing to all 6 senses your haiku…thanks
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Stunning imagery throughout from start to finish…can’t even pick my favorite part 🙂
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Thanks so much C.C. 🙂
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I like the idea of dawn breaking somewhat askew as the last vestiges of night scatter. Very nicely done!
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Thank you 🙂
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Delicate and intricate….wonderfully woven.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Stellar descriptions, TP. Wonderfully long-legged sentiments you stir up.
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Hey thank you 🙂 Long legged!! LOL!!! Words on stilts!
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Hahah black-winged stilts even 😀
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A beautiful piece … leaving a feel of serenity!
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Thanks so much Bastet 🙂
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Very welcome 🙂
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very cool piece – it is making me more peaceful as I start this day.
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Thank you …glad it provided a peaceful start. Have a lovely day!!
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Love your dawn! And the haiku is beautiful.
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Thank you Rosemary. I connected to your FB page Haiku on Friday recently and posted my first haiku there!
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love the levitating sun and personification of dawn….beautiful….
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Thank you Sumana.
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There issome beautiful imagery here. Your haiku is very powerful
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Thank you Suzanne.
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What a beautiful portrait of dawn you have painted with your words.
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Thank you Mary 🙂
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Nice capture of this moment in time. Dawn doesn’t stay long, but you’ve made it linger in your prose. I love your concluding haiku. Peace, Linda
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Thank you Linda 🙂
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I love the idea of a morning swaying… and the soothing language throughout this…nicely penned!
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Thanks so much Kelly.
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An intricate weave indeed. It seems that Haibuns are becoming the dVerse Go-To form; yours is wonderful, off-kilter & brilliant capped with an excellent haiku. I liked the lines /grimy shadows filling the empty right angles of/its lost perfection/.
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Thank you Glenn.. glad you liked it. Haibun are great aren’t they, especially if one likes to write prose as well.
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The askew ‘picture frame’ simile particularly talked to me. I also liked the hopeful note at the end.
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Thank you Gabriella 🙂
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WHere the heArt song travels prevails
on horizons of human soUls.. spiRits
grow.. out expand.. escaping shades
of sea blown grey.. time escapes.. NOW
Horizons Now.. fly high
horizons low.. pass
no go..:)
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The dawn is an intricate weave of hope and despair isn’t it.. excellent haibun
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Thanks so much Bjorn!
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There is a surreal strokes on the painting of dawn with its lost perfection ~ I admire the bird song, a glimmer of hope in the haiku ~
Thanks for joining our Haibun Monday ~
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Thank you Grace.. the Haibun prompt is a great addition .. will look forward to it each month.
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Thank goodness for those small hopes. A relief. Excellent opening. The comparison to the askew picture frame and then personification. Really nicely done.
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Thank you 🙂
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And the reader ”scurries” after your words – I man that in a very positive way. You write like the hills, undulating, with sudden unseen nooks and crannies, then sweeping grand vistas. Sorry I never mentioned linking in your haibun – just had to do it – you know of my admiration for your haibun.
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Thanks for linking to those posts. Appreciate the kind words and all the support Hamish.
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Very beautiful….”as the morning sways.” Sigh.
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Thank you Sherry. Glad you liked it.
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