Twilight drips
into the hollow of my palm,
curling under my nails,
charring my hands,
obsidian marbles,
strung on a ray of soft sunlight,
running down my fingers,
one by one,
counting my prayers;
beyond that swaying belt of trees,
a row of crows,
a silent vigil,
perhaps just empty silhouettes
pasted on the cardboard air,
the birds long gone;
my frozen feet hurry,
one by one,
chasing my prayers.
the lid of the night
closes over the
open sores of the earth,
the seeping pus gleams
in the last red threadย of sunset,
then from its muddy throat
come the screams,
one by one,
taunting my prayers.
Intense and haunting – an awesome write!
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Thanks so much Wendy ๐
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Yes and the battle begins in our cells…
You captured it well…
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Thank you ๐
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Strong poem, there is a pain in the poem that really haunts.
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Thank you.. appreciate your comment ๐
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love how you portrayed the trees and crows…empty silhouetts pasted on cardboard air…
it speaks very closely to how i sometimes see my reality
gracias for sharing this eerie and wonderful piece
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Thank you for reading Marcoantonio. Sometimes life does feel surrreal… or maybe that’s what reality is! Can get quite tangled ๐
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Oh, what a sinister atmosphere you create! Excellently done.
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Thank you Rosemary ๐
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Such beautiful & vivid imagery here, full of emotion and meaning … those prayers are most especially needed to overcome taunting fears.
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Thank you for stopping by Loredana ๐
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The imagery here is beautiful. Your words are marvelously visual and perfectly chosen. The depth of the poem is vast.
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Thanks so much Myrna ๐
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WOW, this is powerful – counting my prayers, chasing my prayers, then that scream taunting my prayers. Visually and emotionally, this poem has great impact. Especially the pus in the earth at sunset.
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Thanks so much Sherry, glad you liked it.
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brilliantly done.a surreal account of the horror of lost hopes that punctuate our everyday lives.
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Thank you Abin.. appreciate your comment.
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It has a dark undertone – somewhere between mystery and fantasy which I like, Thot.
Are we living in real life or a part of a fantasy world. Being alone i guess can answer it.
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Thanks for stopping by Totomai… that’s a lovely question..where does reality end and fantasy begin???
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I specially admire the ending lines ~
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Thank you Grace:)
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What a haunting poem this is! With the open sores of the earth and its pus. Makes one thankful for daybreak.
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stunning imagery
have a good Sunday
much love…
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Thank you Gillena. You too!
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Makes me wonder if we see things even long after they’re gone, like the silhouettes of the crows in the night sky. Beautifully haunting, as Sanaa puts it!
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Thank you Vinay… yeah some things do play on the mind for a long time I think.
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Dang. That last stanza is vivid. It really makes the poem. I like how you use details to really set this up. whew, those screams though interrupting prayers in the end, i can hear them.
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Thank you so much… glad it worked!
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Night time is not always our friend.
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Not always! Thanks for reading Cosmo Newbery,
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Beautifully haunting! ๐
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Thank you Sanaa ๐
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charring hands, frozen feet, pus oozing & screams when light departs and blackness takes the helm…..very dark indeed…
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The opening line drew me straight into this world..the sense of being alone..witnessing a world that is scary and uncontrollable falling through our palms..no one to hold onto..can certainly relate..makes me think of your comment – how our minds never stop…and yet perhaps on the outside no one would ever know…i am glad therefore for our words
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Thanks Jae Rose… know what you mean! The words make a huge difference.
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this ended with a scream…yeah, that’s what i got at the ending. began so delicately and then there came the horror. i loved it, good stuff!!!
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Thank you Jamztoma… glad you liked it!
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“a row of crows,
a silent vigil,”
Loved that!
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Thank you Margaret !
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I have always been happy with the night…until now! Creepily effective.
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Thanks you oldegg… appreciate your comment.
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The last stanza is so dark and direct. Made me think of Poe.
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Thank you for stopping by and reading Kim. Appreciate your comment.
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Beautiful, beautiful story, it was – in my head at least.
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See the stardust is in your head then, blowing over my dark words! Thank you Christy!
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Haunting. Great imagery and the repetition works really well.
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Thank you for stopping by and reading. Appreciate your comment. ๐
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STUNNING
Absolute perfection. Seriously.
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Thank you ๐
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“taunting my prayers” … yet still through our poetry we pray and in such beauty I find hope. Thank you.
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Thank you Tio, I would agree, we do pray through our poetry to all the beauty we encounter in our lives.
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