The birds used to come to the square then. No one knew where
they lived, but they arrived by the dozen with the first stripe of
dusk, ate from our hands as we crumbled hours that had turned
brittle with waiting, minutes baked into bread with the salt of tears,
pieces of us, dark, dark from wanting the light. When birds consume
our fears, our memories, when our shadows slip down their throats,
their feet turn white, their wings grow wide, they turn into angels
that deny the night. When pain is scattered like seeds, they flutter
down, impatient moons in rapid descent, eager for stories, that can
never be told. Last night I saw you alone by the fountain, more
silhouette than man, your fist full of broken dreams, the sky above
you empty. I knew that you had heard the silence. Birds fed on angst
and agony and sin, that learn about love and eyes and separation,
birds of our dusk can become white angels but they never sing again.
Beautifully penned.
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Thanks Vivian!
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๐
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Stunning imagery in this impactful, brilliantly rendered work.
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Thanks so much Wendy ๐
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This is amazing–beautiful and uplifting for a Sunday evening.
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Thank you Chrissa!
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Perfect!
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Thanks so much!
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โBirds fed on angst/and agonyโฆโ and the closing choked me a bit. Some truths, some beautiful truths, hurt so much. Changing and adapting are wonderful thingsโtoo often necessaryโbut they can costโฆ nearly everything one is.
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That’s true.. the price at times is way too high… perhaps not even worth it. Thanks Magaly!
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Evocative and beautiful!
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Thanks Ayala!
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This is so hauntingly beautiful and that end is sublime!
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Thanks so much Donna!
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This is incredibly beautiful, the birds feeding on our sadness and growing white wings. Your closing line is absolutely perfect. Wow!
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Thanks so much Sherry!
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So beautiful & touching!
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Thank you!
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Wow!! You took my breath away with your write!
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Thanks so much Annell!
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I can see those birds… at first I saw crows, but that final end your birds became so much more. Maybe we look at the world with different eyes when we are in sorrow.
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Maybe we do!! Thanks so much Bjorn!
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‘Birds fed on angst and agony and sin, that learn about love and eyes and separation’.. this is so poignant!
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Thanks Sanaa!
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This speaks to me of the alchemy of artists to turn something terrible into something majestic, all the while acknowledging that some of that original ache will always be a part of the mosaic.
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Thanks Rommy..what a lovely thing to say..poetry is pretty much that isn’t it!
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Oh that ending…..”birds of our dusk can become white angels but they never sing again.” Whew, your poem is evocative, intense, and takes me on an interpretive journey trying to decipher all of its nuances.
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Thanks so much Mary… pigeons aplenty around our urban highrises… maybe they were the inspiration .. don’t know!
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I love how you create your own mythology, and turn anguish into beauty without diluting it.
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Thank you Rosemary…
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What a phrase, Rajani, ‘the first stripe of dusk’! And a wonderful image of birds arriving by the dozen. I also love the lines:
‘…ate from our hands as we crumbled hours that had turned
brittle with waiting, minutes baked into bread with the salt of tears’
and
‘… Last night I saw you alone by the fountain, more
silhouette than man’.
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Thanks so much Kim!
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But, if everyone got the life and love they imagined and wanted, that would be a “perfect” world. And we would be perfect people within it. Ain’t happening. If the world and we were perfect, there would be no need to choose anything. We would not need to learn anything. And to me, that sounds really boring. Why live and breathe at all? What would be the point? And yes, there would be no poetry and that thought scares me more than a perfect world.
Elizabeth
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Yes too much perfection can’t possibly be a good thing.. the best things perhaps come flawed! ๐
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You amaze me. Most of us run from the pain of loss and absence. But again, you turn it into a thing of exquisite beauty with your words and imagery, yet retain all the sorrow and pain it holds. Thank you,
Elizabeth
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Elizabeth, you’re very kind. It would be a better world if everyone had the life and love they imagined and wanted. But perhaps, then, there wouldn’t be any poetry ๐ Thanks so much.
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Here here! Well said.
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Thank you!
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