the sun rolled down the Aravalli hills,
kneeling for a moment on the desert floor,
as if in quiet prayer,
slipping quickly now,
into the sands of the afterday,
fingers cold, digging deeper,
finding mine
over the bones of ancient whispers;
the mirrors sewn into her veil
birthing a sky of dancing moons,
a princess despaired,
will it matter in a hundred years, two hundred,
the queen smiled,
as caparisoned elephants marched away,
her voice wet with the blood of a million battles,
to you, my dear, she said,
to you, it always will;
in the bitter cold of Jaipur’s streets,
where the high windows still lower their gaze,
we walk past pink city walls, stained with shivering night,
the quenched sun leading me,
fingers locked in mine,
sand silver in our hair like tears,
the stained glass
still warm from our lost breath.
The verse in the middle interjected a beautiful magical feel to the piece. It made for an interesting contrast with the reality of the scenes described in the first and last verses.
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Thank you Rommy.
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‘…sand silver in our hair like tears,…’
What a beautiful line, among many others in this piece. Lovely imagery.
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Thanks Paul.
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Wonderful images and words! Thanks for the walk in wonder.
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Thank you 🙂
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This poem seems to speak of aging and time…bones of ancient whispers..you have a lovely way of creating a picture in the readers mind.
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Thank you Truedessa 🙂
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Thank you for taking me to this place I’ve never been, but now long to see. To hear those ancient whispers from the pink city walls. Really like those high windows that lower their gaze. Have to wonder is it shyness, or curiosity?
Elizabeth
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Both I think..women were veiled in those days and looked at life from behind veils and grilled windows…totally different now.
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You have sketched Jaipur, masterfully … I am there. And I love the form you have used with the stanzas – really love it – I may try sometime along that line myself, with the two “outside” verses being descriptive and the mid-verse being more of a commentary. Wonderful writing!
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Thanks so much, am glad that distinction came out..I was wondering how to separate timelines without getting too long and complicated…
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Such energy enters your poem at the beginning with Sun! “the mirrors sewn into her veil
birthing a sky of dancing moons” ~ my favorite lines.
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Thanks so much.
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I looked up Jaipur… and found your poem a beautiful reflection.
ZQ
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Thanks so much ZQ. Was there recently, it is an amazing place with tons of history.
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Oh how I love the image of the sun “kneeling for a moment on the desert floor”—such glorious imagery there 🙂
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Thank you CC.
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Sun gods meet Queen and princess and me/we in heat and care, warmth and reflected light Each time I read, the narrator changes from the dead witness to those who linger half alive to those awake enough to welcome the handhold of the sun always kneeling beside us. Wow.
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Thanks so much Susan, seeing the remnants of the past makes me wonder about how we connect with them..
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Love the connection between place and emotion… it feels like a symbiosis between man and streets
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Thanks Bjorn…
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Oh my. How gorgeous:
“fingers cold, digging deeper,
finding mine
over the bones of ancient whispers;
the mirrors sewn into her veil
birthing a sky of dancing moons,
a princess despaired”
“sand silver in our hair like tears,
the stained glass
still warm from our lost breath.”
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Thanks Iris, Much appreciated.
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Through your beautiful lines, so full of imagery, I, too, walked through the streets of Jaipur, the pink city. I especially loved the bones of ancient whispers and the dancing moons. Just lovely.
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Thanks so much Sherry.
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“will it matter in a hundred years, two hundred,
the queen smiled,”
Guess its will always matter, for life keeps renewing self, through generations.
Thanks for dropping in at my Sunday Standard this morning.
much love…
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Thanks Gillena. Much appreciated.
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So many captivating images – i think my favourite was – bones of ancient whispers..such an evocative piece
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Thank you Jae.
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What great images you gave us in this writing Thotpurge especially those little mirrors in her veil reflecting away any curious onlooker.
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Thanks so much Robin.
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we walk past pink city walls, stained with shivering night,
the quenched sun leading me,
fingers locked in mine,
sand silver in our hair like tears,
the stained glass
still warm from our lost breath.
This is sooo beautiful!!! Ah Jaipur the glorious pink city 😀
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Thank you Sanaa, yes it is quite a spectacular city.
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Your ability to evoke images in your writing certainly shines through in this piece of which flows gracefully from start to finish. Really did enjoy this.
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Thanks so much Julian. That’s very kind.
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