Shadorma

Micropoetry Month: Nov 2017: #16

~ Rajani Radhakrishnan ~ 62 Comments

Micropoetry MonthSeems like a Shadorma kind of morning! If you’re new to the form, it is a six line poem following the 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllable count.
Give it a shot or share any micropoem using comments or Mister Linky.

 

(1)

evening train
for a little while
it was us
and the sun
and our words briefly touching
through the dark tunnels

(2)

in his bag
buried in a book
about birds
and fairies
a bent origami crane
that would never fly

 

Waiting

~ Rajani Radhakrishnan ~ 48 Comments

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empty streets,
a lone tavern light
seared the mist,
even stars
that whispered in her closed eyes,
dissolved in the dark;

he found her
sunbeams round her throat,
the blunt knife
in her hand,
still bleeding on the table,
her final poem.

Linked to MLM where the prompt is for a Shadorma Pair inspired by Van Gogh’s Cafe Terrace at Night

Om

~ Rajani Radhakrishnan ~ 45 Comments

Paloma at Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie has a super prompt for a form called “Elfje”:

Line 1:     1 word (Color or feature – the atmosphere of the poem)
Line 2:     2 words (Something/someone with the color/feature in line one)
Line 3:     3 words (More information about the person/ object in line two)
Line 4:     4 words (The poet in relation to the object in line 2– a conclusion)
Line 5:     1 word (The “bomb” or “essence” of the poem)

subtle
lotus buds
in yogic postures
I feel their breath
“Om”

I tried to write the “same” poem in Shadorma form- (a non-rhyming six-liner in 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllables)

sonorous
reverberation,
lotus buds
breathe slowly;
chanting in yogic postures
Filling the soul. “Om.”

And as a standard 5-7-5 haiku

lotus buds exhale
chanting in yogic postures
the soul fills with “Om”

How much of the poem/image is constrained by the limits of a form or possibly enhanced? Which do you think works?

05/07/15:  Linked to Poets United