Paloma at Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie has a super prompt for a form called “Elfje”:
Line 1: 1 word (Color or feature – the atmosphere of the poem)
Line 2: 2 words (Something/someone with the color/feature in line one)
Line 3: 3 words (More information about the person/ object in line two)
Line 4: 4 words (The poet in relation to the object in line 2– a conclusion)
Line 5: 1 word (The “bomb” or “essence” of the poem)
subtle
lotus buds
in yogic postures
I feel their breath
“Om”
I tried to write the “same” poem in Shadorma form- (a non-rhyming six-liner in 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllables)
sonorous
reverberation,
lotus buds
breathe slowly;
chanting in yogic postures
Filling the soul. “Om.”
And as a standard 5-7-5 haiku
lotus buds exhale
chanting in yogic postures
the soul fills with “Om”
How much of the poem/image is constrained by the limits of a form or possibly enhanced? Which do you think works?
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