I’ve only attempted one Fibonacci poem before and that time I went up to 21 syllables (8 lines). This time the muse was more generous: 10 lines with 55 syllables on the last line! Is it still micropoetry?
Give it a shot anyway! The number of syllables in each line follows the Fibonacci sequence (0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55…)!
Bring your own micropoem to the party – any form, no form, whatever inspires you today! Use the comments form or Mister Linky to share!
let’s
say
life just
birthed itself
let’s just say we are
part amoeba, part fish, part ape,
even part question wilting in the rain, still waiting
for the melding of machine and man that will explain what there was before gravity,
what happens when we stare at oceans and skies, why certain words know how to bind themselves into poems, why love is more difficult than hate,
lets say this as we argue over colour of skin, as we craft an apocalypse, as if that matters more than moonlight streaming into our eyes, unobserved, part gill, part opposable thumb, part petal, part sun, part answer.
There are two ways of taking this in, and one is with humour, which must not be maligned, as it makes it all the more powerful.
Of course when read as presented it merely demonstrates/underlines the bitter, tragic, hopeless (?) ignorant state of too much of humanity. Racism is so awful it makes me sick.
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Makes me sick too Hamish… how pathetic can human minds get. Have seen a fair bit of it as you can imagine, seems unlikely that it’s going away any time soon.
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I’m not much into form but appreciate that you are excellent at it. But what impresses me more are the words here. So many brilliant lines.
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Thanks so much Myrna.
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Wow! The close on this is brilliant and wise. I loved this piece!
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Thank you Wendy 🙂
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I love this form. I have only ever gone to 8. Think I will give this a shot.
I think humans have a fear of anything that is different from themselves….a sort of primal fear and a predisposition to destroy anything that is perceived as a danger.That is why a belief system that forbids discrimination and maintains that all are equal under God and the law is a good idea .
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Looking forward to your poem Cressida… thank you 🙂
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This is wonderful. So much to ponder. So very true. One can only hope we will all come into the light as one someday. The answer may lie in figuring out “why it is so much harder to love than to hate”…Wow! This whole poem is such a good takeaway. Thank you Rajani.
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Thanks so much Pat, glad it resonated.
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🙄
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😊
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Let’s say this really got me thinking!
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🙂 Glad it did Colleen!
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Glad it did Colleen…thanks 🙂
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I personally like the differences between, that make us unique. What I Don’t like is the sense of superiority of one race over the other. Accept the difference, grow with the diffetences, learn from the differences. We all need love.
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Accept, grow and learn.. absolutely! Thanks Toni.
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Outstanding work!
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Thanks so much 🙂
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An incredibly moving poem….to erase some of these manmade constructs….how lovely the world could be.
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Yes indeed!! Thanks Donna.
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Beautiful Fibonacci filled with truth.
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Thanks Linda.
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This is such clever and deep thinking Rajani! The questions and mysteries of life are unanswered, yet we are stubborn to hold on to ‘made-up’ boundaries of race, colour, our differences thinking we know it all!
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Thank you Namratha 🙂
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An excellent fib with a powerful message.
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Thanks Vivian 🙂
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You’re welcome!
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I love the idea of being part question and part everything else.
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:Thanks Magaly 🙂 I will be hosting Micropoetry month all through Nov so drop in whenever you can and read/ share a poem!
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WOW! This is spectacular! You rocked the form but, more so, what you say is spot-on, making is think of the deeper questions, which long for some better answers than humankind is so far coming up with.
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Thanks Sherry.. glad you liked it. Much appreciated.
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Perhaps because we have been so well trained in believing that our part of the answer, is the one and only true answer? We have seemingly not yet learned how to listen. I love the Fibonacci form, and love where you took it.
Elizabeth
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A very challenging form as the number of syllables increases! But much fun. Yes we have no place it seems for an opposing point of view on anything.
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We continue to be small, unthinking creatures…even worst, lead by a leader that is worse…..nicely done!!!
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Small, unthinking creatures… yes! Look what big damage we can do collectively to the earth and climate and nations!
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Race is really so insignificant in the light of all the beautiful things about being human. I think God intended it to be unique shades of beauty – but humans have twisted it in ways that defy my understanding. And yes, why is love more difficult than hate!!
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Why indeed. Thanks Mary 🙂
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These lines:
ets say this as we argue over colour of skin, as we craft an apocalypse, as if that matters more than moonlight streaming into our eyes, unobserved, part gill, part opposable thumb, part petal, part sun, part answer.
made me smile. I like that you used petals and gills…makes me think of flowers and mermaids. pretty things. thank you.
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🙂 🙂
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You have left me absolutely speechless!❤️ These lines will linger in my memory; “lets say this as we argue over colour of skin, as we craft an apocalypse, as if that matters more than moonlight streaming into our eyes”..❤️
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Thanks Sanaa.
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why can’t we just be different without the mistrust and hierarchies – I love the way you have made us all part of each others origins – very original
“part gill, part opposable thumb, part petal, part sun, part answer.”
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Thanks Laura.
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Colour, language, diet and beliefs all evolved by need still readily the cause of hatred in this world. More so now as there is so much money to be made from our differences.
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You said it Robin.. in the end it is greed isn’t it for money, resources, power….to what end!
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Such a powerful poem very clever
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Thank you Jae.
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“we craft an apocalypse,”…What the humans are capable of, oh!! You’ve put it brilliantly Rajani. I wish I could participate here today and tomorrow but I’m traveling tonight. See you later, here 🙂
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Thanks Sumana. See you soon.
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I so agree, the concept of race does not even apply to humans. With all that we share we are more like siblings or at most second cousins.
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Thanks Bjorn. All the hate and war in the name of perceived differences really needs to stop. I can’t imagine what those who want to splinter our world are thinking.
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WoW! My son was talking about this tonight after dinner…the fact that there is really no such thing as race. We are all the same…we are more alike than different, humans as a species. Race should not fit even in the equation. I find that exhilarating!
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I agree. It’s disgusting how this still happens and breaks people, homes, communities and nations. Thanks for saying that it does not even belong in any equation.
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