see you tonight, he said,
hyphenating the last word,
biting on the feeble dash,
scattering crumbs of day and dark
into the space between us,
and then he was dropping
sheets of afternoon light from the brink,
entombing us in golden haze,
double locking the doors,
hiding the key from the moon,
there is a way promises
can be kept,
slowly darkness will be forgotten,
dusk will be the creasing of a brow,
and the shadow of a ravenβs wing,
the exclamation
of a sun nailed to a high beam,
forever, a speck in its unseeing eye,
the clock, its arms spread awkwardly,
a smile frozen on its four-eighteen face,
and to-night in unequal halves
still swearing a togetherness,
lying in the fragmented dust.
there is a way promises
can be kept.
I love the anticipation and mystery of this poem–was the promise kept or not–to be seen tonight. Such is the unpredictability of love π
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Thanks so much.
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Beautiful and almost ominous in its intensity. Well done!
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Thanks so much π
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to-night “biting on the feeble dash”
Love, love, love how this image tumbles around in my mind, conjuring up all sorts of possibilities!
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Thanks Magic!
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to-night in unequal halves
still swearing a togetherness,
lying in the fragmented dust.
I so admire the craft you bring to each poem. The way you set this up in the opening lines is brilliant.
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Thanks so much Kerry, that’s very kind.
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Fantastic writing! I love the extra power, you added to the powerful close on this piece.
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Thanks so much Wendy.
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Give me the living sun any day, and let the promises find their own way or not find it. Sorrow and loss is, at the very least, not oblivion. My heart breaks when I must nail something living into wood.
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Thanks Susan. I like what you said about leaving promises to find their own way.
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You make the language new! Love this all, very beautiful β and particularly enjoyed the ambiguity of ‘lying’ in last line.
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Thanks for picking that one up.. much appreciated.
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Beautifully penned!
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Thanks Ayala.
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Every time I read your work I am struck anew by the freshness of your imagery–same here–just wonderfully penned
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Thank you. Much appreciated. So glad you liked this poem.
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Love, love, love β€ Read it three times and I love it more and more each time!
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Thanks so much CC…delighted you liked it!
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This has such beauty and depth, even sadness in the idea that a promise can be kept but the love can wear off. Lovely writing, very astute, wise.
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Thanks so much Myrna.
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This was like a dream! Loved it!
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Thanks Bekkie.
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The lines I love most…..”dusk will be the creasing of a brow, / and the shadow of a ravenβs wing”. A truly gorgeous poem. A pleasure to read.
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Thank you Sherry.
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Indeed when can find images from dark to light here…and one is always glad when promises made can be kept!
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Thanks Mary.
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What a great read. I love the emphasis on PROMISES CAN BE KEPT!
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Or the expectation of fulfillment extended infinitely till it is forgotten.. thanks so much Beverly.
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“dusk will be the creasing of a brow,” Wow!
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Thanks ZQ π
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Is that a promise or a threat? You double down on it, and your imagery, as usual, is striking. The contrast between daylight and darkness is beautiful, and reminds us that beauty can, and often does, hold many dangers.
Elizabeth
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Thanks so much Elizabeth. Promises become threats in the hands of those who never plan on fulfilling them…
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I really love the play of light and dark.
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Thanks Magaly.
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The emotion in your words is palpable – powerful write!
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Thank you π
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Alas – a lie can slip by easy.. a brief moment of comfort… that will snowball into something bigger.
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Absolutely… thanks so much Bjorn.
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oh i read the poem sip by sip…such a collection of beauty…
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Thanks Sumana…sometimes you use the beauty to mask irony..or pain. Glad you liked it.
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What a incredible picture your words painted in this poem. What a fantastic read it was.
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Thanks so much Robin, glad you liked it π
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Oh this is absolutely gorgeously written!β€οΈ
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Thanks Sanaa π
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My goodness this is beautiful.
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Thanks so much Barry.
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Very well penned and expressed
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