there is something wrong
with the acoustics here,
the sound floats up like a cloud,
and hovers for a moment
in a kind of mute crescendo,
before it becomes a swallowed hush,
a pink smear today,
yesterday it was green,
like another balloon snagged
on the broken ribs of a giant cactus.
there is something wrong
with whispers in hospital rooms,
as the murmuring quiet
waits for the tree
to be felled,
so we can all hear again,
instead we watch the white ceiling,
a flickering vision,
sighing slowly,
turning into a deflated rainbow.
That balloon and the weight of the hospital room is a powerful image..
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Thank you Jae.
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Great title, followed by a feast of striking images.
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Thanks so much π
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Thoughts such as this come easily when in hospital as you seem to betotally out of control of your own life.
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Thanks Robin.
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There is some wonderful imagery in this poem, especially the deflated balloon on the cactus ribs.
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Thank you Sherry.
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Profound imagery.
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Thank you Purba.
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Such strong and redolent images here! One of my favorites from you β€οΈ
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Thanks so much Sanaa.
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love how images come to you and stay with us too….i also loved that giant cactus line…
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Thanks Sumana π
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Yes. The air has been let out of giant lungs and we limp along on almost nothing. Almost. “There is something wrong here” makes that vivid. And we swallow our words.
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Thanks Susan. So interesting that you likened the deflated balloons to lungs… made me read the poem again from that point of view…
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A giant cactus with broken ribs in a hospital: the acoustics are bound to be a bit off.
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Don’t know where that came from… sometime we just channel alien messages ππ
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