two days from empty.
two hours from dawn.
behind the lattice of the old guava tree,
a pregnant cloud counted her sorrows,
it had been a while since the last implosion,
the detritus had found its way back,
climbing on the coattails of an indifferent sun,
the rain she had lost filled her eager womb again,
how much longer?
with slate grey envy,
she filleted the gloating moon,
so sure in death,
so sure she would be born again,
emerging from the ghastly dark,
like the teasing glimmer
of an unfulfilled promise,
over and over.
his face etched in argentine woe,
the man stared out of his window,
two days from full,
two hours from dawn,
he heard himself crack,
this was the brink,
there would be no turning back,
there would be no other path,
he felt the night creep slowly
into his fading eyes,
somewhere
a cloud had moved
to cover the smile
of the relentless moon.
A dark beauty scored in your lines. That relentless moon
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Thank you Leslie..
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Infuckingcredible! This is a stunning write that you should most definitely submit somewhere for publishing! This is the best thing I’ve ever seen you write! Rejoice in it!
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Thanks so much Bekkie. Appreciate your kind words.
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This is a very thoughtful piece!
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Thank you Mary.
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Resilience, it happens, over and over again. And yes; there is death, when resilience looks to the moon’s smile and utters a sigh.
An excellent craft dear Thotpurge
Much love…
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Thanks so much Gillena..
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What a great poem this is. It was a real pleasure to read it.
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Thanks so much Robin.
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I read this twice as I tried to decode the message, it is almost a mystical warning from that relentless moon.
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Thanks Truedessa…nature’s resilience in the form of water recycled into clouds over a period of time or the predictable waxing and waning of the moon does little to reassure the weak human heart…
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That old devil moon, still watching and waiting. Lovely poem.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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” two days from full,
two hours from dawn,
he heard himself crack,
this was the brink,
there would be no turning back,”- Ah, “bouncing back” captured so articulately! WOW! Magical poem…
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Thank you Panchali..
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This is so beautifully written. Loved the imagery.
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Thanks Purba..
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I love the idea of “Two From Eternity”, and enjoyed the two perspectives. I think I like most the idea of the cloud being pregnant with rain. The description of his face in “argentine woe” is vivid. I could see him.
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Thank you Sherry…
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Such lush and vivid images here 😀
Beautifully executed.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Thanks Sanaa.
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The last verse is divine – in a poem already there! i love the use of timings – it adds a sense of immediacy and timelessness
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Thanks so much Jae 🙂
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Fascinating word-picture and story.
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Thank you Rosemary.
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Wow! What unique images. I love this, for example: “she filleted the gloating moon” and the personification of cloud and the comparison of she and he. You move me.
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Thank you Susan.. nature has examples of all types of behaviour, it is when we seek in our darkest moments that we sometimes end up following the inappropriate model…
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“Two from Eternity” indeed!! wow!!…most beautiful….
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Thank you Sumana 🙂
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Amazing. 🙂
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Thanks Celestine..
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Sheesh. This is incredible.
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Thanks so much. Glad you liked it.
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