they came out for you,
the constellations in their spectral gowns,
Venus with her steadfast silver eye,
and we watched them dance,
only kamikaze moths shattering the silence,
their death songs shushed against the old hurricane lamp,
and we dreamt of ancient boats braving the sea,
our weathered faces lifted to the night,
eyes transfixed by the faceless pointing stars;
until somehow it no longer mattered,
if we reached the shore,
if there was a shore,
if we were together,
if there was a forever,
waves curling the colour of gun metal clouds,
ragged sails flailing like flags of surrender,
my prayer returns without ear, without trajectory,
bitter and cold against the roof of my mouth;
but the uncharted gloom has its own lexicon,
if you blink your stars out of the brine,
primal archetypes throw patterns in unlit light;
searching for reason, i negotiate with pain,
despairing solitude, i bend time in vain,
though i know somehow it no longer matters,
that I am sailing alone,
where the moon tides are borne,
that the ocean will mirror its conceived sky,
that the water will whisper senryu,
to sinking hearts,
in the voice of the guttural desert wind.
So much to love in your words. I can only repeat what others have already said. And yes, it should be whispered to keep it whole,
Elizabeth
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Thank you Elizabeth. Glad you liked it.
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What’s not to love here with, “the constellations in their spectral gowns” and “ancient boats braving the sea”—and bending time, too? Wowzers…..this is utterly magical and mystical 🙂
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Thanks so much CC.
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Your expressions are so strong and vibrant!
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Thank you 🙂
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Lovely! I can see why you went with the title: Whispered senryu … “that the water will whisper senryu, to sinking hearts”: an indelible line of poetry.
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Thanks so much Wendy…
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Should say “banging.”
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I love Venus’s steadfast eye and the stars spectral gowns. In my mind the moths were banding against the moon, the hurricane lamp.
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Thanks Colleen…
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Don’t think my comment posted, so I’m saying it again. Your poem is superb. It’s sadness went straight to my heart while I was envisioning all the lovely imagery you invoke. Truly this is beautiful poem.
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This is so beautiful. It sang to my heart. I felt the sadness while all along envisioning the beauty of the sky, the stars, the images you describe. Really, this poem is superb.
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Thank you Myrna…so glad you liked it.
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I too loved the imagery of the ‘kamikaze moths’. Excellent writing.
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Thank you Paul.
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Wow, your imagery is so beautiful, there are too many phrases to repeat….this is so lovely, to read and envision.
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Thanks so much Sherry.
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This is an absolutely amazing poem! The imagery, the lines, the mystery of it all. I am most haunted by that great line about ancient ships out a sea. Marvelous!
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Thanks so much Matthew. Looks like we both picked an “ancient” theme this time around!!
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the whispered tone adds to the beauty and depths of your poem
Well Done, Thotpurge
much love…
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Thank you Gillena…
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Lovely writing…with feelings of wistfulness & yearning.
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Thank you Mary.
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A deep beautiful sadness lingers through each line as your words continue…
‘my prayer returns without ear, without trajectory,
bitter and cold against the roof of my mouth’
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Thanks so much Donna…so glad it came through the poem.
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What a stunningly beautiful poem; but with sad wisdom and resignation.
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Thank you Robin.
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kamikaze moths and bending time – what wonderful imagery and an almost desperate plea..sometimes the world can feel very empty
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Thank you Jae.
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despairing solitude, i bend time in vain,
though i know somehow it no longer matters,
that I am sailing alone,
Despair in solitude but taking it by the horns and facing up to it. That is the right way. One is forever in control!
Hank
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I love the dark imagery of solitude… of pain and wandering. The kamikaze moth is a description that will stay with me.
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Thanks so much Bjorn… 🙂
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Beautifully heartfelt write 🙂
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Thank you Sanaa.
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Sigh….. so inexorably sad and beautiful. If you are sailing alone someone who has exquisite thoughts and expresses them so beautifully has to be found and treasured. Sail on in beauty !
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Thanks so much Rall..glad you liked it.
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Beautifully done. I love those ragged, flailing sails…such strong imagery 🙂
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Thanks so much Ryan 🙂
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Most welcome 🙂
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