dark clouds rumble
a lone mynah
swallows a tear
For CDHK where we learn Basho’s ‘Narrowing Focus” technique in which you start with a wide-angle lens for the 1st line, switch to a normal lens for the 2nd and zoom in for a close up for the 3rd line, drawing the reader to a single basic element of the haiku.
Basho writes:
old village
not a house without
a persimmon tree
I haven’t seen a Mynah in years! Lovely!
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Thanks Carol …all the mynahs are here I think, I can hear them in the mornings!
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Very nice! You’re welcome!
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Great illustration of the style of haiku. Congratulations.
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Thanks so much.
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a lone mynah
swallows a tear
Poor thing! The weather is just isn’t good!
Hank
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Well done on the focus!
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Thanks Janice 🙂
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Awesome! What a powerful, focused haiku.
Is there a list of these techniques somewhere?
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Thanks Ryan. I found this link http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm but don’t know if that is the entire list. Hopefully, I’ll take a shot at most of them by the end of the month.
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That’s great! Thank you so much 🙂
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beautiful~
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Thanks so much Cindy 🙂
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