he boarded at noon,
frail in his mud patterned robes,
casting no shadow
on the platform that had forgotten its name;
we let the silence drip into the space between us,
the empty sound, a misshapen cup between strangers,
collecting smells and voices and half-seen landscapes,
that the senses discard like oversized clothes,
as wheels and tracks count the seconds,
the dusty breath of the summer fields
streams hot against our bodies, bent politely away,
trapped in a time frame thrust through a restless carriage window;
I woke up to the shrieking hush of a motionless train,
the hard berth pushing my bones into an alien light,
he was staring into the dew threaded morning,
his lips moving in an unbroken prayer
something (or someone) is dead on the tracks,
four hours we’ve been standing here, a woman said,
I saw his dark ringed eyes floating like unslept oil
over the trembling azure of his face,
I threw off the blanket of sin and despair
that had slumbered with me all night,
journeys cannot be between two points,
his stillness asked, what do you call arriving?
I leapt down from my lofty height
my naked feet seeking the floor beside his,
I let a ripple break in our brimming cup,
Sir, can I bring you some tea?
I love this. I have never been to India, only seen it on television or in film. I feel as if I was there. Marvelous.
I love this line:
I saw his dark ringed eyes floating like unslept oil
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Glad you picked that line, I enjoyed writing it, thanks so much. π
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This is so descriptive and also reminds me of those long journeys in a carriage through India.
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Thank you… hope you enjoyed your travels in India.
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I agree.. there is so much to this than meets the eye π great job!
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Thanks Sanaa π
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I really liked this poem, as it spoke metaphorically of reality. You have given us the sights, sounds, and feelings of the journey & allowed us to be right there enroute with all the other travelers!
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Thanks so much Mary, glad it worked.
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i suppose an interesting part
of communal travel where
time becomes now
without words
is a vision
of non
verbal
communication..
but of course
with smart
phones faces
become screens
and the person across
the aisle of seats may
never even
exist..
but anyway..
connections
come
warm
or cold..
as travelers come and go..
who is dead or who is alive
increasingly difficult to measure..:)
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Absolutely Katie… its true we don’t even acknowledge the presence of others, lost in the rectangular world of our phones, being alive seems real only if we are acknowledged in our virtual avatars….thanks so much for reminding us of how petty it can all become.
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Flesh smiles.. My friend..:)
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I think a train trip can be so many travels at once… The inner journey that we make is so much more important than the travel between two stations… love the connection created on this journey between the narrator and the man… I see life springing from the one left dead on the tracks. Your poems just gets stronger and stronger every time.
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Thanks so much Bjorn, that’s very kind. Being among poets who write fabulous poetry and constantly provide momentum helps enormously.
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Nothing too like the charred blurbs of poverty chugging alongside the train’s rhythm that hark back to ancient smell, as earthy as it is in need, and as redolent as it is bare.
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That it exists, that we see it through unseeing eyes, accepting and denying it all at once…is either a complete mockery of our existence or the only way to bear it and continue to hope.
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That we see it at all is testament to the little bit of humanity in us that makes hope possible. That we deny it at the same time is testimony that that hope makes steep demands of us, and that is as frightening as it is liberating.
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Very frightening my friend, especially if one is stuck on the “meaning and purpose of life” road…perhaps the liberation will come as more wisdom or acceptance comes along. Hopefully.
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This is such an evocative, stunning line: “I threw off the blanket of sin and despair
that had slumbered with me all night”–wow! That is a heavy overnight trip for sure!
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Thank you C.C. and yet with it, in a way, comes a certain acceptance of adversity that a narrower quest for purity cannot claim.
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Yes! Have you ever read A Fine Balance by Rohinton Mistry? For some reason this reminds me of that. Spectacular book.
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Haven’t read the book C.C…but will check it out.. thank you π
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This reminded me of a friend who has traveled far and wide and many times to India and I could just imagine her having a similar scenario. I enjoyed your vivid accounting…very well done!
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Thank you…hope she enjoyed her travels..much to see and much more to experience!
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WOW! Now that was a trip!
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These things do happen though luckily (I suppose) my own trips have only been delayed by weather or strikes or technical snags! But I do miss the train journeys now that they seem so few and far between. Thanks Sherry!
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Profound. You capture that feeling of travelling across India and bought back my own memories of doing the same back – complete with the wait for hours as the tracks were cleared after some one jumped in front of the train!
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Wow.. amazing that you actually experienced it…I was just going with a fictional (though not improbable) situation…eerie! Hope it brought back good memories as well.
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Yes, it was a train going across northern India many years ago. Now that you’ve raised the memory I can’t actually remember where I was travelling to but I do remember the train stopping for hours in the afternoon and an Indian man explaining what had happened.
Memories of my travels India are always good – even the tragic and the macabre somehow have their place in the mosaic.
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Travel memories are always precious..like gifts to unwrap on quiet afternoons…!!!
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I enjoy reading train journals as the trip always bring strangers together in sometimes unexpected ways ~
I am guessing he is a spiritual guide or leader ~ I specially like how you captured him here:
he was staring into the dew threaded morning,
his lips moving in an unbroken prayer
Thanks for linking in with Poetics & wishing you happy week ~
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Thank you Grace… yes was going for two very different travellers on the same journey…
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A very different type of travelling, this compartment of metaphors travelling across a mysterious land.
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Beautifully put… thanks so much Toni.
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