remember those rose-blush evenings
when opinions lingered
like fresh strawberries
on virgin tongues,
an unfamiliar tartness
teasing our fructose smiles;
Gandhi and Che, Moses and Hafiz,
sprawled on our sinking couch,
our debates longer than the night,
our silence louder than the TV,
our prejudices painting contradictions
on the animated canvas air;
you were indignant,
that we mocked the instinct of the cat,
our collective cheering of an underdog mouse,
a sign of our own inadequate lives;
and what will you feed a hungry cat, you asked,
and we hid pink stained lips,
in the collars of our madras checks;
the puppet masters, you said,
have got your thoughts on strings,
your eyes roll
when they angle their wrists,
your words flow
when they tickle their hips;
but you cut the cords and wrapped yourself
in blankets of scented earth,
wished minds would waft into the sky
to fill the dark of the the waning moon,
that we could discover why we were made
why despair set in so soon…
then why in these Autumn years
do you let the rodents win?
why is your heart tethered to this world,
why do you care what they will say,
why ask me to temper my love,
what is unnatural anyway?
Linked to Poets United where the midweek prompt is “animation” and to Dverse Poets OLN.
This made have lots of of thots – so that means it’s a wonderful poem!
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Thank you.. very glad it did! Appreciate you stopping by and reading my poem.
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No particular reason why this brought to mind “dangling conversation” by Simon and Garfunkel. Maybe it resonated for the same reason that song did. Your poem arcs the relationship though and talks about the way the clouds fill the mind’s sky and the passions shred into bits of text lying on the floor of our memories, losing meaning and relevance. It’s a fine piece and takes passion’s ashes back to their source.
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Thank you for your kind comment. I just read the lyrics to that song and I am glad that the poem conveyed that sense to you and made the connection to a very beautiful song.
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Life.. Passion Fool
underdog cartoon
character.. over
eat flows.. river
needs.. Strong
Nature.. Force
alive.. liVinG
inside.. now
worldculture
Tool.. NOW
fire inside
plays life..
no
day
rest..
mouse
toys
cat
plays
beat goes on..:)
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Thanks for stopping by Katie
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A really terrific write
Much love…
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Thanks Gillena π
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What a wonderful contrast you evoke between then and now: that carefree moment, the voice of rebellion turned to caution turned to despair… The direct address with added reminiscing works so well here.
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Thanks so much Marina, glad you liked it.
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I like this a lot.. I see mostly those years where politics where discussed in long nights in various student rooms, when we where still idealistic and strong in beliefs.. of course the underdog is always right. Maybe i misunderstood, but this is what I read into your poem.
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Well sometimes people give up their beliefs and surrender to popular opinion as they grow older, which of course is usually in favour of the underdog… Maybe losing a bit of themselves in the process….
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I liked that cartoon too and of course, I was always rooting for that mouse! But in your opening verse when you wrote of late nights sharing philosophical talks, it reminded me of the days of my youth doing the same thing. Those were exciting times. And this is a great poem!
Gayle ~
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Thanks Gayle…and how our opinions evolve and change over the years based on “real life” …
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How right you are!
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Gorgeous writing, especially the final two stanzas–I love where you took this prompt==love this piece!
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Thanks so much Audrey. Glad it worked.
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I like the questions in the ending verse ~ A creative approach to the cartoons of our childhood years ~
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Thank you Grace.
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Exquisitely woven….Insightful poem. As they say—the past beats within us like another heart….smiles.
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Thanks Panchali.
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“What is unnatural anyway?” That is a great question to ask. I think it is human nature to as questions and wonder why, and that I believe leads to some things seeming unnatural only because it is different than what someone may see as normal. Its just a matter of view. Great poem.
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Thank you Kenn.
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I adore this!
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Thank you, glad it worked!
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Love the first verse especially.
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I especially like the image of “rose blush evenings.”
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Thanks for stopping by and reading Victoria π
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Wow this poem is spectacular. I love the debate, the cat and mouse, (I’m always for the mouse), but so true what will the cat eat? And these autumn years, well I have questions too. I love the depth in this poem.
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Thanks so much Myrna.
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This so beautiful and it took me back to the days of my youth being strong minded, opinionated and gloriously free set to take on the world. How I wish I had written this.
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Thanks OldEgg, exactly my feelings…a look back to the “good old” days! Appreciate your comment.
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Interesting that this poem is based on a cartoon….smiles.
But, alas, I hope that the rodents do NOT win.
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A childhood favourite! Thank you Mary!
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Goodness, THIS:
“an unfamiliar tartness
teasing our fructose smiles”
Wonderful.
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Thank you so much π
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WOW! This is a fantastic write. You are on fire these days, kiddo. “that we could discover why we were made, why despair set in so soon…..” WOW!
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Thanks so much Sherry… those animated films are still fun to watch, even with older, more cynical eyes!
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Indeed – what is unnatural…perhaps the powers that be who take the magic our of ‘opinions lingered
like fresh strawberries on virgin tongues’ – a wonderfully insightful and vivid poem
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Thank you Jae Rose π
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Oh my Word! To bring those mighties together and have them debate the cat and mouse is indeed to animate the canvass. I hate mice and want cats to take over. But I hate the oppressor and want the oppressed to rise up. The voice of the onlooker-participant is powerful, and the detachment at the end knocks my socks off!
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Thanks so much Susan… It’s my tribute to the one cartoon that kept me entertained all those years ago! Great prompt.
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A poem full of animation (of various kinds). I enjoyed it very much.
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Thank you, glad you liked it π
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This is gorgeous work!! π
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Thanks Sanaa π
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