the frenzied calisthenics
of a fevered whim,
moving thick and syrupy
over corrugated boards of reason,
until sanity bends,
limp and soggy,
dissolving in the fibres
of its own inconsequence.
come, he says,
let’s peel these layers of topaz blue,
the stars are hiding at the end
of this sagging cardboard box,
strip the azure bark
and the moody clouds will float away.
I wonder how we will collect the stars,
but he laughs,
sounds that bend and stretch
like boiled honey,
touching forehead to liquid feet.
without the sky
they will fall, he nods,
like shimmering rain,
and in the night,
we can walk over the hills,
gathering them
like diamonds.
I feel the flaps give way,
the burning of muscle
as it breaches the void,
reality pirouettes along rainbow arcs
that uncurl into obtuse lines,
I empty the day from my baskets,
it is time to pick stars
from the sky stripped grass.
Lovely imagery and superb metaphors.
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Thank you 🙂
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a dream of a poem
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Thank you Victoria
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A very fantastical piece.
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Thank you!
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Love the idea and how you handled it! I want a basket of stars!
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Thanks so much Annell..hope you get your basket.
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strip the azure bark
and the moody clouds will float away.
That’s what one hopes for. Chase away the blues and live life to the fullest! Great thots!
Hank
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Thank you Hank 🙂
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Your imagery here is deliciously sensuous, dreamy yet detailed. It felt like music,
Elizabeth
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Thanks Elizabeth, appreciate your comment!
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gathering stars ~ so magical and dreamy 🙂
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Thanks Loredana.
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A lovely piece … exquisite metaphors. “but he laughs,sounds that bend and stretch like boiled honey”: an indelible line of poetry.
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Thanks so much Wendy, glad you liked it.
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Such an adventure into surreal so bold it was almost Dada to me! It scared me to think it was possible to do this anywhere but in a star-decorated room, and to be so seduced into the action. But then the idea of carrying day and/or night around in a basket, reminded me of poetry itself. I love poems that make me think.
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Thanks Susan, appreciate your kind words.
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Oh this is one of my favorites…..I adore the use of language and the images painted here as if we could collect the stars…..’we can walk over the hills, gathering them like diamonds’.
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Thanks so much Donna 🙂
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Such evocative images here. Well done.
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Thank you.
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Lovely use of language and images in this. I do like the romantic feel of it, the fairytale quality. Stars turning to rain and becoming diamonds we can collect. Simply a wonderful poem.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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I like you imagination with weaving words into illustration!
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Thank you ZQ.
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this is so romantic and ethereal. lovely.
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Thank you Stacy
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I empty the day from my baskets,
it is time to pick stars
from the sky stripped grass.
What an amazing conclusion to a beautiful poem.
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Thanks so much Kerry.
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Such beautiful thoughts and images, all the way through. This poem is such a pleasure to read.
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Thanks Sherry 🙂
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Love the idea turning the rain in diamonds and collecting them…nice on re-phrasing ‘time to collect stones’. Wonderful reality jump over the rainbow….
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Thank you 🙂
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it looks like we can really collect stars!
your use of language is amazing. 🙂
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Thank you for your kind comment.
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This is very good. I especially like the first 2 lines.
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Thank you 🙂
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Wow i like your use of imagery in this one, i’ll consider it my favourite piece from you, so far
have a very nice Sunday
much love…
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Thanks Gillena…appreciate it greatly.
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This poem is really a sensory feast! Lovely wordings & images.
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Thanks so much Mary 🙂
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Beautifully fantastical – and of course real. 🙂
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Totally 🙂 Thanks Rosemary.
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I really love how you painted this almost like a fairytale, collecting stars like diamonds… You really followed through the narrative, and the last stanza becomes almost comforting.
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Thanks Bjorn… Maybe if we allow it, someone special can show us how miracles happen….
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And if we let us self be led, the miracle we be reciprocated.
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Every word from the title to the unfolding magic within is glorious – especially liked – sounds that bend and stretch like boiled honey – delicious
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Thanks Jae Rose, glad you liked it.
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Rich in tone and language 😀
Such a beautiful piece.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Thanks so much Sanaa 🙂
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What a glorious collection of metaphors in this entrancing piece.
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Thank you 🙂
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Fine use of language here
Best Wishes
john
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Thanks so much John.
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