“We write to leave a trail that says:
to find me, come this way”
©Sherry Blue Sky
Inspired by the last two lines of Sherry Blue Sky’s beautiful thought provoking poem “Why we write”. Does the interpretation of a poem reveal the reader’s thoughts much more than it explains the vacillations of the poet’s mind? I wonder….
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There are more truths in a barstool stain,
than in the iambic catharsis of a poet’s pain.
…but what if my poems are rain clouds,
with the lost recipe for petrichor…?
… what if they are a five spice trail
a treasure map to a forgotten soul…?
A blinking cursor between garrulous lines?
So every voyeur can track the signs?
…maybe these verses are dead stars,
a bloody path to a buried past…?
I made a list of your Freudian slips,
(alphabetized and hyper-linked of course)
and a matrix of metaphors by texture and mood.
Oh, I can read the pattern in the broken shards,
the jagged edges of angst and hope,
the kintsugi flares over reconstructed time,
But that can be anyone,
that is everyone,
not just you.
…maybe the welded stanzas are magic mirrors
reflecting your thoughts as your lips move,
you follow the trail your mind reveals,
it switches back, comes back to you.
So wonderful to visit a second time & again the kintsugi line captures my heart. Also love: but what if my poems are rain clouds, / with the lost recipe for petrichor…? & the dead stars lines.
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Thanks so much.. glad you visited again… love the idea of kintsugi…if only we could all wear our scars so magnificently.
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A very deep thought… Conveyed through wise and perfect words!
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Very nice. It’s like the constant brutal reason vs. aesthetic conflict that happens in my brain every day.
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Thanks so much Joshua.
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There are some good lines here ~ jagged edges of angst and hope … and poems like rain clouds … lost recipe for petrichor ~ very inventive 🙂
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Excellent opening lines. You made me sit up and take notice. Ha.
There is truth there as well. I feel like this is almost an internal dialogue
with some nice wit poured in as well. Ha.
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Thank you X. I enjoyed working on this poem. Stared writing it a soliloquy, a rant but it was clunky and I thought it worked better as a conversation.
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maybe the welded stanzas are magic mirrors
reflecting your thoughts as your lips move,
It is often seen this way! One cannot help but notice the giveaways. Whatever moves our mind to the writing it is certainly one that comes from our thoughts. Truly said Thotpurge!
Hank
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Thanks so much Hank. Appreciate your comment.
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“the kintsugi flares over reconstructed time,”…such a beautiful line…
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Thank you Sumana… can’t seem to find your link on Poets United!?
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I love the two voices having almost two different conversations.
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Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it.
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Interesting, that circular embrace of poet and reader. So well worded in your poem
Have a good Sunday
Much love…
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Oh this is a marvelous conversation with our own poets…what we fear and long for inside…the 2 sides!
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That was absolutely beautifully written.
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Thank you Jyotsna
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Interesting poem. Good to know.
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Love the switchback of meaning in your poem – what a rollercoaster of words
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Thank you 🙂
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If it is a trail–isn’t it interesting that the two voices hardly hear each other (until “reason” begins to analyze “emotion”)? You are on to something here whether it is a poet’s two selves or two poets!
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Thank you Susan… appreciate your comment. Wish you good health.
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Well done …with respect and creativity.
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Thank you 🙂
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Wow, this is a fabulous write, my favourite of yours, I do believe. So nice my quote sparked your poem. I love when that happens. The lines that really stood out for me is “what if our poems are rain clouds with the lost recipe for petrichor?”…..wow!
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Thank you so much 🙂
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This is SO good. I really like the way it’s structured.
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Thank you 🙂
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Awesome, read before, came back to re-read, will read again for sure,
real poetry, first that I have seen on a blog in over seven years of blogging.
Many inspirations are coming forth from your lines,
glad to credit you and provide links, you deserve and demand to be recognized.
No disrespect for JP, who provided me with your introduction, her talent for
prose and poetry from abstract prompts cannot be matched.
Too much thinking for a Sunday morning …
Love, hugs and looking forward to more … ME
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Thank you, glad to hear it will inspire new lines/poems..look forward to reading them soon 🙂
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Some words, example from Sherry’s, could bring the best in a poet – being a poet itself and being a reader.
Same as Bjorn’s I thought this is a conversation of one poet to his / her self. Well-played, Thotpurge.
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Thank you Totomai, highly appreciated.
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What an excellent reflection on Sherry’s last two lines of the poem… 🙂
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Very deep and thoughtful words!
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What a wonderful meditation on Sherry’s words – which became uniquely your own..the list of Freudian slips made me smile..i think you are right – poetry probably helps us understand ourselves if we are lucky others understand too but that poetic mirror is the thing that counts
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Thank you Jae Rose… 🙂
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The balance between the two parts of a poet.. How intriguing with the purpose versus form.
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Thanks Bjorn…I really loved your interpretation of this as a conversation the poet has with his/herself…
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a fabulous dialogue between the rooted one and the flyer – how one makes the other sound so frivolousl and almost silly and by so doing conveys a somewhat harsh and cynical rationalist. ‘the jagged edges of angst and hope’ the life blood of poetry ,
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Thank you Laura 🙂
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Often a reader finds much more that the poet planned. If we reveal ourselves in our writing the reader too will be unmasked by his interpretation.
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