In the Morning Light

in the morning light
sunshine trapped between its toes
footprints in the dust

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in the morning light
darkness wrapped in salty black
waits outside my door

down the empty street
sunshine trapped between its toes
a shadow walks away

night fills the outline
of retreating memories
footprints in the dust

After I wrote this, I realized it wasn’t true to Chèvrefeuille’s Troiku form. He uses each line of the base haiku as the first line of the subsequent three. I have retained the lines in their original position to stay close to the 5-7-5 syllable count. Posting this one anyway, will try again to write a true Troiku. Linking to Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie and Imaginary Garden.

44 thoughts on “In the Morning Light

  1. I think you created a new form so you get to name it! 😉
    For now I’ll just call it ‘Thotpurge’s Troiku’ (variation).

    I’m a rebel when it comes to forms. New and different is good.
    Thanks for visiting my post on the prompt and I hope you got to eat some tomatoes. 🙂

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  2. Wonderful, regardless of whether it followed a given form. I was quite enchanted!

    I’m deconstructing my URL because WordPress interprets URL’s as Spam, in my experience.
    poetryofthenetherworld dot blogspot dot com slash 2015 slash 08 slash the-ballad-of-benjamin dot html

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  3. Maybe it doesn’t adhere strictly to the Troiku form – but I think this resonates with a strength and clarity – that works in the way you have used the repetition.

    The imagery is great – intriguing and stunning.

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