See the heavy pregnant clouds, blotting the summer sky.
Melting beneath eagle wings, fanning the summer sky.
I hear them call, before I hear, the footsteps of the rain.
Cupped in their palms the last sunbeam, fighting the summer sky.
With leaves and grime, those memories, drip down the sobbing roof.
Pluck dead stars out of their hair, cursing the summer sky.
They take my hand, we stumble through an ancient downpour.
Splash darkness from the puddles, staining the summer sky
Water whispers to the earth, messages from the clouds.
We eavesdrop, under the trees, mourning the summer sky.
(in Ghazal Form)
What can I say that hasn’t been said b4? Simply beautiful. I am impressed as I have been learning about the ghazal firm and have been playing with it.
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Thanks so much. Am sure you’ll have much fun working on your ghazal !!
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I love how the images in your poem become alive, you walking with memories, while water/rain pouring and healing…what a wonderful refreshing poem! x
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Thank you, appreciate your response to the poem.
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I like the flow in this one.
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Thank you π
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I love the notion of “pregnant clouds”—that’s something fresh to my ears. Just Lovely! Haven’t done a Ghazal before, but it somewhat looks & sounds interesting enough to try to. Well done! Thanks for the poem.
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Thank you Kelvin… would love to read your ghazal when you write it. Please do share it or pingback.
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I love the rhythm in this as soothing as rain and as enlightening as fresh water…
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Thank you Jae Rose, glad you liked it. Once again, wasn’t able to leave a comment earlier on your lovely poem using my WP ID… the line “Time skips rope on the spot” brought the whole poem together for me.
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aaah…i can hear the “rimjhim” in the lines of your ghazal…love it when the blazing summer sky is stained with the thick, black monsoon clouds…
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Thanks so much Sumana… nippy mornings and grey skies…the worst of the heat is probably over for now.
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I love the ghazal form; so nice to see this lovely example.
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Thanks so much Rosemary, appreciate your comment.
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I love being in and watching a summer downpour…such a rush to the senses….and I especially loved the last line, ‘We eavesdrop, under the trees, mourning the summer sky.’
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Thank you Donna π
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Frustration when you planned something on a summer day and the rain try to ruin it
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Thank you Totomai π
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I dig this style, and your imagery too!
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Thank you Brother Ollie π
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Strong images! Of course we mourn the summer sky, but also notice the beauty of the storm. This is my favorite: “Splash darkness from the puddles, staining the summer sky.”
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Thank you Susan… appreciate your response.
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Oh that those clouds could really communicate all of the messages they hold within. We can only eavesdrop on them when they rain! Smiles.
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Thank you Mary π
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This is very lovely, lots of sensory details and images. The sobbing roof is very good. I think summer gardens are very thankful for the rain.
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Thank you Sherry.. some technical glitch wasn’t letting me leave a comment on your poem.. loved the line: “for fear
the wound of blooming will be
life-threatening” π
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So many brilliant turns in this ghazal. I feel the different aspects both its gentleness and the sorrow of not seeing the sun.
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Thank you BjΓΆrn .. the monsoon is here and the mornings start with grey skies!
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Water whispers to the earth, messages from the clouds.
We eavesdrop, under the trees, mourning the summer sky.
Speechless..!
xoxo
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Thanks so much Sanaa, appreciate your response.
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Wow, this is good–love the sobbing roof.
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Thank you Dell Clover π I’m enjoying the challenge of this form…much fun!
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Well that’s how it should be–having fun!!
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Most of the challenges ARE fun, I agree!
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