Silver blemish on her cheek
like an erect phoenix
rising from her
lopsided smile,
his hands shake
as he strains the Milky Way
into her eyes.
Poetweet: Exactly 140 characters long including spaces and punctuation.
Silver blemish on her cheek
like an erect phoenix
rising from her
lopsided smile,
his hands shake
as he strains the Milky Way
into her eyes.
Poetweet: Exactly 140 characters long including spaces and punctuation.
THOUGHT PURGE 
So much in those 140 characters
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I enjoyed reading your piece.
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Thank you 🙂
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I’ve met eyes like that. Nice writing.
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Eyes like that …must have been mesmerizing… 🙂
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So much depth in so little words….great work!!
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Thank you Sreeja 🙂
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Ha ha ha! This is HILARIOUS. You rule.
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Wow! 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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I love the last two lines. There’s nothing like a good metaphor.
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Thank you Ann 🙂
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Short and very very sweet! Delightful.
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Thank you Rosey 🙂
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Moving in the Milky Way can be quite an effort just to be seen by her!
Hank
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that was very romantic
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it…
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By which i mean letters…we are easily confused :~
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Glad you liked it 🙂 Thank you Jae Rose 🙂
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140 potent words – quite delicious
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I laughed as I read it but will still be awake all night trying to picture that scene.
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Thank you oldegg… hope it brings you sleep and pleasant dreams 🙂
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Those last 3 lines knocked me over–fabulous!
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Thank you… it was a fun prompt.. very disconnected words!
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I woke up thinking I could offer a “jumble” prompt–why not? I just have to think of something clever to call it–as Wordle is used by at least 2 other bloggers.
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Sounds quite romantic, though I wonder if I read that right 🙂
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Thanks so much Vinay… not sure if there’s another way to interpret the mood of the poem!
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Damn! All I got was a Rocky Road. Tasty though.
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🙂
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