Like giant steel pincers, clouds rise out of the Arabian Sea, grab the sun by his flaxen hair, force open his mouth and yank out his blazing golden fangs. In the ensuing vapid gloom, the sightless wind, like a marauding elephant, searches for her lost shadow.
Nature leans against a prostrating coconut palm and fills her scrap book with new images- the thirsty rain sinking into the cracked lips of the fevered earth, valiant little feet testing the profundity of dimpled puddles, ancient rivers lecturing fresh waves on the painful depths of the next abyss…
Does she pause, quill propped on the disappearing horizon, when she sees him huddled under the leaky canopy the old Peepal tree? Does she know him- last year’s homeless man, still staring at the lighted window across the flooded street?
ripped from a notebook
that reckless paper boat
my first poem weeping in the rain
Very interesting way….so nice….actually I am from kerala…loved the poem..
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Thanks Sreeja, glad you liked the Haibun. That picture was taken in Alleppey.
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Wow! This is just so vivid!
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Rajani – well done, so much said with brevity. I am glad you could participate in my prompt.
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Thank you Abhra.. that was a much needed prompt at this time of the year!!
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Rains with eyes of forever.. same intent.. same desire
ever wet with love for all.. oh.. to imply that
rains are less than Love.. no matter
how forceful.. soft.. or long
they fall.. is never to
know nature
true
at
heARt..
Evil hurricanes
or Monsoons
or puddles of
nasty mud
only exist
in human
eyes..:)
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“my first poem weeping in the rain”—I could read this as sad as a love letter from someone who gets hurt inside. Poignant & written in different facets. Thanks for the poem!
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Thank you Kelvin… that’s a beautiful interpretation as well….
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Oh my that’s So Good!
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Thanks Dell Clover 🙂
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Most welcome.
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The vivid imagery of the prose, leading up to the haiku..beautiful. loved the last line..’first poem weeping in the rain’
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Thanks so much Dorianna.
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Oh I love this. The haiku being a complement to the wonderful description of the monsoon as a creature. The homeless man.. And that first poem floating as a paperboat. Stunning.
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Thank you Bjorn. Glad you liked it!
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i do hope she knows him and stops in time… nature has such power and if you see how people get homeless in a storm – so tough – that poem weeping in the rain is a powerful image
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Thank you Claudia.. yes beautiful as she is, the monsoon can be destructive as well.
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my first poem weeping in the rain….what a spectacular line!
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Thank you Kanzen 🙂
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Beautiful work 🙂
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Thanks so much Sanaa 🙂
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Saw you over at Poets United..enjoyed the interview..sad when a poem weeps in the rain..
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Thanks Truedessa 🙂 Appreciate you stopping by and reading my poem.
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This is the best work I’ve read in some time.
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Thanks so much Lila 🙂
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I enjoyed the prose, specially the opening verses, very fast-paced as the marauding elephant ~ For the haiku part, (imho) I would have liked a trimmed down version or even a contrast for drama ~ You are a versatile writer & congrats for being featured over at Poets United ~
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Thank you Grace. Sherry at Poets United was very kind to consider my blog..very honoured. Haibun is a recent experiment for me.. miles to go I suppose!
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Great imagery in this wonderful haibun. Peace, Linda
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Many thanks Linda 🙂
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Creative take on the monsoon. The first part has a violence to it that parallels the monsoon, and contrasts nice with the scrapbook/kinda relief feel of the next. I rather have a thing for paperboats – nostalgia I guess. Ha.
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Thank you. Paper boats and puddles… the stuff of childhood memories 🙂
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I love the change in style. Your prose is, dare I say, even more invigorating.
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Thank you… am exploring this haibun form and am really liking it too.. must put skull and crossbones signs..beware..more coming up soon 🙂 🙂
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This is written like you swept the desk clean of itensils first, sending glasses, plates, mementos and coffee cups crashing to the floor – a very difficult style, and you pulled it off! – how could it be doubted you could! And…………..my Kerala, my beautiful Kerala…
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Thank you… Kerala tourism boasts the tagline “God’s own country” and the beaches, backwaters and the fish curry do live up to that moniker 🙂 We have such mixed feelings here when the monsoon finally arrives .. made it easy to write this!
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I really did not know you were from Kerala. Yes, I know of ‘God’s Own Country’ and have been referring to Kerala in a book I am writing about forests.
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India yes..but not from the state of Kerala. Good luck with the book, would love to read it when you’re done!
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Woops, sorry. I have a couple of books out, one free url below. A main character is an Indian woman adopted in Finland – http://www.lulu.com/shop/hamish-managua-gunn/put-your-lips-together/ebook/product-21882044.html not forcing it on you<<<<<!
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Sounds terrific.. will go find it for sure!!
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I especially love the haiku–stunning.
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Thank you Dell Clover 🙂
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Most welcome.
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Powerful and poignant! 🙂
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Thanks so much, glad you liked it.
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