He wove tanka from peacock wings,
through nimbus rings,
with cherry blooms,
on rainbow looms;
Filled glowing antiseptic walls,
with bird breath scrawls.
with whispered heat,
with braided feet;
Alone was just a waiting game,
always the same,
string beads of pain,
again, again.
This one is definitely meant t be heard, and read aloud. I listened to one poem at the dverse.com prompt and I must say it really brought it alive, a wonderful experience, with soft music behind, using soundcloud.com – worth thinking about I think.
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That’s an interesting thought… would be fun to experiment!! ๐
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Love it ๐ Glad you were inspired. You’ve made me want to go and try it again!! This is lovely…that first line is utterly divine ๐
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Thank you C.C…. it was so much fun!
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Oooh, I love your poem and this form seems so fun to work with. I didn’t realize that C.C. gave prompts. I need to check her out. Thank you.
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Thank you Victoria, it wasn’t a prompt though.. I learnt of this form when I read C.C’s poem- then decided to give it a shot..was much fun! ๐
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Oh this is quite stunning–enviable!
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Thank you Dell Clover, glad you liked it ๐
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Welcome.
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So profound!
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Thank you… interesting form..trying to rhyme 4 syllable lines was crazy!
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